I thought I wrote concisely, but Zinsser is a master. Chapter 3 of “On Writing Well” is about trimming words that aren’t doing any work.
Zinsser says: “If you might add, add it. If it should be pointed out, point it out. If it is interesting to note, make it interesting…”
Words to live by, or at least write by. It’s harder than it sounds, though.
Can anyone trim this entry?